Wednesday, May 9, 2012

Blood Wedding topic sentence

Beggar Woman is a personified version of death because of her conversation with the moon and her demeanor toward the bridegroom.

4 comments:

  1. Accuracy - 4
    Insight - 2. Your sentence doesn't introduce anything that the reader wouldn't have picked up already. We know that she is death and we know of her conversation and demeanor. Pick out some specifics of those things and elaborate on them.
    Clarity- 3. Again, be more specific.

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  2. Accuracy- 5
    Insight- 2
    Clarity- 2. Is the beggar woman a symbol of death merely because of her interaction with the moon, or are there other aspects that portray her symbolization of death?

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  3. insight: 5
    Accuracy: 5
    Clarity: 5

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